Untitled- my first poem

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  1. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    She walks alone in the dark, not knowing where she is going or when she will return. But she is not afraid of the things that linger in the dark, not afraid of being hurt. She has been hurt before, and will be hurt again. Nothing can out do the pain she has bestowed upon herself. She feels no pain, and does not fear it. Her heart is cold, like the black sky. It will remain this way for ever more, she has given up on the world. And the world has given up on her, or so it seems. The darkness enfolds her body like a blanket; it is comforting to know something so invisible could make her feel so welcome.
     
  2. gloomydaze

    gloomydaze Member

    For a first time poem you sure have done a wonderful job of expressing your innermost "raw" feelings. Excellent work, keep it coming!!!
     
  3. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    thanx! i wrote it a really long time ago!! but thanx!!
     
  4. BlackPegasus

    BlackPegasus Well-Known Member

    That was great. I could feel the emotions from it.

    Mia
     
  5. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    I remember reading this poem on FTI!

    I loved it, and now it seems to fit everything that is happening right now!

    Love, BP
     
  6. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    yeah it fits me too...this is my best poem!! well in my mind
     
  7. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    I think there are more that should be your best!
     
  8. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    oh i know..but i cant seem to top this one..even though other people might think it..this was on my downwird spiral to where i am now.
     
  9. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    I know what you mean tho...

    BP
     
  10. Dead_Alive

    Dead_Alive Guest

    My first poem:

    Written to my wife:

    "Roses are red,
    violets are blue...
    if I didn't love you..
    then I'd be through.
     
  11. Madsys

    Madsys Active Member

    i felt like i was walking with that girl...there was so much of that poem i felt connected to...
     
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