Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by nagisa, Feb 23, 2012.

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  1. nagisa

    nagisa Staff Alumni

    As I walk a path apart from you
    My mind cannot help but think of your face
    With each step away I take

    All those fantasies are not forgotten
    But are instead buried in the very pit
    Of my being that still longs for your touch

    This is not lust, no not simple idealization
    I am not naïve in my desire for you
    As for years your name and face have haunted my thoughts

    With time my need for you has only grown
    Developing into something that consumes my days
    Surely no obsession has ever been so intensely bitter-sweet

    This is a love that has known no comparison in my life
    You inspire my happiness and despair
    Captivate me, if only to break my heart over and over

    It is a cruel thing you do, though you do not know it
    My heart is in the hands of a blind fool
    And yet I still submit to each blow

  2. nagisa

    nagisa Staff Alumni

    I decided to title it: My Only Inspiration

    Not sure if I like it enough to keep the title but it's better than 'untitled' imo, lol.
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Lumina, this is an intensely personal poem and conveys a lot of feelings. I like how the last four lines almost summarize all the yearning and aching of the other lines combined. :)
  4. nagisa

    nagisa Staff Alumni

    Thank you :) I really appreciate the reply.
  5. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    I love the way it flows, and I love the ending.
  6. nagisa

    nagisa Staff Alumni

    thank you, pit. :)
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