Up and Down - triggering.

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by SmilePretty, May 7, 2009.

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  1. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    There must be some alternative way
    To end this day but not this life.
    The feelings come back like they'd never gone
    What have I been waiting for?
    Nothing feels better than lighting up and
    Taking a long drag from a knife on my skin
    It just keeps going
    Up
    And
    Down
    Give me some solace.
    Give me something other than this pain.
    It's so daunting being in this alone.
    Where can i draw my strength from so I can make this end?
    I hope I find it at the end of this rope
    Where it will be wrapped in the knot and steming from the loop
    Ah, strength. Just enough to go
    Up
    And
    Down.


    :sad:
     
  2. Entity

    Entity Well-Known Member

    i like it Lucy, it shows a lot of emotion and feeling through the words, it showed me through scenes of thoughts racing in my head. I liked it :D
     
  3. bluestar

    bluestar New Member

    just enough strength.... strength of the rope and strength to do that one last thing? dunno if i'm reading too much into it, but i like the double meaning.

    very haunting. liked it. :)
     
  4. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    the double meaning was meant to be there :smile:
    thank you both for replying, i like to hear reassurance now and again that my writing doesnt suck.
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    I like it :) Thanks for sharing!
     
  6. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    thanks lynn :hug:
     
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