Valentine

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by lulu rose, Nov 6, 2007.

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  1. lulu rose

    lulu rose Guest

    Ok, I'm not actually a poet or a creative writter. I can write and I've done a few poems. But nothing amazing. I tend to write whatever comes into my head really.

    This one I thought up whilst I thought about valentines day and the fear of losing someone.

    Caution, this isn't a trigger to me but it could be to some.

    Valentine

    Will you be my valentine?
    do or die?
    just be mine?

    Will you be my valentine?
    die for me?
    never leave?

    Will you be my valentine?
    Break my heart?
    hurt my mind?

    Will you be my valentine?
    Tear me apart?
    thats a laugh!
    for if you do
    you're the fool
    for without me, you'll never be.

    So if you'll be my valentine.

    Be sure that you will never leave.​


    As you can see it starts out fairly nice, but turns a bit negative towards the end, it's what I was going for.

    Comment, crits and your own veiws on what it all means are welcome. I always love to hear other peoples opinions. I value different opinions very much.

    Thank you.
     
  2. lulu rose

    lulu rose Guest

    awww no C&C seriously, I dont mind.
     
  3. lulu rose

    lulu rose Guest

    man my poem must be crap o.0
     
  4. asvt

    asvt Well-Known Member

    No it's not i like it
     
  5. lulu rose

    lulu rose Guest

    aww thank you ^_^

    :hug:
     
  6. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    'Tis good. Very unique. :hug:
     
  7. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    I like it too ^ :)
     
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