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  1. Vulnerable
    Naked before the four winds
    Waiting for the revelation
    Too weary to look up
    Bled out from pleading
    for consolation
    But for dried tears, nothing left
    Clinging on
    from one moment to the next
    Hoping, praying for some rest
    other then The Endless
    Begging for some mercy
    Is it bravery or folly
    to hope,
    and that it merely seems
    that one is aloneā€¦
    The besieged mind is
    a vast place to get lost in,
    and each wrong step
    feels like a sin
    Madness takes its toll
    But I am no longer in control
    My guidance has been stolen

    Last edited: Sep 11, 2006
  2. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    "...praying for some rest
    other than the Endless"

    I love it!!!:smile: :smile: :smile:

    love, least

    PS; in the line "and that in merely seems"

    did you mean "it" instead of "in"?? If you can't edit it, I can. Tell me if.
  3. Luliby

    Luliby Staff Alumni

    That is a fabulous poem and should be published!
  4. Thanks for the lovely feedback. I'm always honoured. And yes, Least, that's supposed to be an "it", if you could fix it that'd be grand. I didn't catch it until it was too late to edit. Thanks for that...


    EDIT: Bunny just fixed it for me - it's done (thanks Bunny)
    Last edited: Sep 11, 2006
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