What do you think?

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Things, Jul 1, 2010.

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  1. Things

    Things Well-Known Member

    I'm trying to design character that's a writer and a musician. He's somewhat based on Johnny Cash in that he writes some pretty sad songs (hell, the example here is titled "Sad Song"). He's a background character, but it's important that his songs don't suck. :p

    So, any opinions would be appreciated:

    Sad Song

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    I don't want to write a sad song

    Don't want to be the weak one, the broken one

    Don't want to be the one
    The one that's supposed to snap

    And take it all back

    I don't want to write a sad song

    On the mend
    With the sick trend

    I don't want to say it
    Nobody wants to hear it
    But they just don't understand it

    Just gotta smile, they told me
    Just gotta smile

    They don't understand

    I don't want to write a sad song

    Don't want to be the weak one, the broken one

    Don't want to be the one
    The one that's supposed to snap

    And take it all back

    I don't want to write a sad song

    Don't want to be the weak one, the broken one

    Don't want to be the one
    The one that's supposed to snap

    And take it all back

    It's all in my head
    I'm sick of my friends

    We're a freak society
    It's all about control

    They said my act's getting old
    And wonder why I feel alone

    Sick of my whine
    How I'm wasting all this time

    I don't want to write a sad song

    But what else can I do?

    I'm sorry, but I'm the weak one
    The broken one

    I've snapped and I can't take it back

    I don't want to write a sad song

    Don't want to be the weak one, the broken one

    Don't want to be the one
    The one that's supposed to snap

    And take it all back

    I don't want to write a sad song
     
  2. Daphna

    Daphna Well-Known Member

    Gee that is a hard one. Sorry I can not be of more help. Blessings.. ((Hugs))
     
  3. Things

    Things Well-Known Member

    Ah, it's alright. Thanks for posting anyway.
     
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