Who am I to you?

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Matt93, Jun 22, 2011.

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  1. Matt93

    Matt93 Well-Known Member

    Darkness ensues the light,
    Luminous items may only last as long as a breath.
    In my world each day is a fight,
    Hollow, my body emotion has left.

    I was left broken, tearful,
    I howled toward the moon to beg.
    She never heard full,
    My screams never did become loud enough, I may as well be dead.

    Don’t I matter in a world where,
    Everything is frowned upon and nobody really cares?
    You think that your life is so fucking fair,
    But we're mis-understood, miscarried into world where success is rare.

    But hell, who am I to you?
    Who are we to say no more pain?
    Breath I savour till the end of truth,
    Sorrow in us all is un-named.​

    Any comments would be appreciated xD
  2. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    A pretty good piece of work right here! In my opinion, this would make a killer writing stimuli. The writing and wording of this is highly dramatic, yet some lines in this occasionally coincide to what I think of! Thanks for sharing!
  3. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    i agree, this is really good as writing stimuli. and it rings so true, really resonant.. :thumbup:
  4. Matt93

    Matt93 Well-Known Member

    Question... what do you mean by writing stimuli? xD Sorry for the late replies guys, I've been away from my laptop for a long while xD

    Thanks for the positive feedback though, it means a lot! :D
  5. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    Writing stimuli, as in it sparks a whole new dimension. For me atleast, the phrase "what am I to you?" is like the opening line, idk of what but it lingers deliciously lol. This is the kind of stuff that leaves you touched by inspiration. :cupid2:
  6. Matt93

    Matt93 Well-Known Member

    That's awesome to hear! I'm really glad :D
  7. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    :hug: :hug:
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