Words written for a fallen friend...

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by HalfBlind, Apr 16, 2008.

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  1. HalfBlind

    HalfBlind Active Member

    I wrote this a few days after I found out one of best friends had been murdered, I thought about going over it later and improving it but that would ruin it in a sense... the poor writing is mainly due to really unclear thinking (meds, anger, and emotions in general), anyway...

    To death or time do friends part: by me...

    As my mind writhes in loss,
    I search my mind to find days long lost.
    I look into your blank eyes,
    I’m looking to see life but there’s no surprise.
    I look back at days we spent as friends,
    But all I can think about is today, where all that seems to end.
    Should I speak now, or never more?
    Should I close my eyes? Now wet and sore?
    All I can hope for is that there is something better at the end,
    Rest well, friend.
     
  2. Terry

    Terry Antiquities Friend Staff Alumni

    What a beautiful eulogy :sad: :hug:
     
  3. That was really moving - said so much in such few words. And nothing "disjointed" about it at all...
     
  4. ScouseJM

    ScouseJM Well-Known Member

    its very beautiful and the finishing line is so simple and yet so moving i think..well done x
     
  5. HalfBlind

    HalfBlind Active Member

    Yea, I think it's best that it stayed short and simple.
     
  6. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    I'm sorry for your loss..great writing..:arms:
     
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