Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by DarknessSurroundsMe, Mar 30, 2012.

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  1. DarknessSurroundsMe

    DarknessSurroundsMe Well-Known Member

    A darkened room
    with walls painted black
    a low bed
    with a sink and mirror at the back
    so I sit
    after firmly bolting the door
    I lay gently
    my things on the floor
    a pair of scissors
    and a razor blade
    a bottle of vodka
    and my tools of trade
    I slowly stand up
    with getting undressed
    let it fall to the ground
    exposing bare flesh
    then with the blade
    I score a line on my arm
    the one thing that helps
    is doing me harm
    I dont press too hard
    just enough to draw blood
    I'm not suicidal
    just misunderstood
    the pain from inside
    is getting too much
    so I turn to destruction
    to keep me in touch
    hurting myself
    helps give me control
    which is sadly lacking
    in life as a whole
    I think I've changed
    from who I used to be
    the fear and pain
    swallowed up the old me
    I can't rationalize
    that which I do
    I know it's stupid
    but I think it's true
    that this is
    the only way I can survive
    anti-depressants can't keep me alive
    I fear I've apalled you
    well, dont be alarmed
    I'll try to keep covered
    the scars on my arm.
  2. TigersMomJ

    TigersMomJ Active Member

    This is great. I really like it!
  3. DarknessSurroundsMe

    DarknessSurroundsMe Well-Known Member

  4. scarlettdrknss

    scarlettdrknss Well-Known Member

    this really is an awesome poem!
    i mean both the meaning of it and the structure, love it =]
  5. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Nicely done! You've included lots of details that really describe the experience. I like how the rhyme scheme leads the reader through some of the tough images - but does that without trivializing them. Hope you'll write and share more :) .
  6. DarknessSurroundsMe

    DarknessSurroundsMe Well-Known Member

    Thank you Acy and Scarlett for your kind words.
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