Your Everything

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  1. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    *I wrote this because i dont know... confused i guess...
    trying to get something out of my soul, and its hard to do...COMMENTS PLEASE!!!!*

    Its not a simple answer
    Its not a simple question
    Life is life
    We must move forward
    In order to see what the future brings

    Will I know if your in it
    Will I know if we make it through this test
    Life is life
    And knowing what I know
    I will be left with nothing more

    Before I found you
    It was a total mess
    Being alone
    Knowing about the falls
    Hiding my heart

    I hide myself from the world
    Hoping to make it by
    Hoping to be left unnoticed
    To live in the fear
    Of a past that still haunts

    I always wonder
    Will I find someone like you
    Before I met you
    Hoping that there might be a chance
    To be with you for the rest of my life

    Not worrying about the fall
    Giving it my all
    But only in a shelter
    Of being at peace
    In my own mind

    I never had the chance to be
    Raped, Abused, Used
    I was a person
    Being treated as equal
    Without any attachments

    I was me
    I wasnt afraid of the fall
    Because I knew you were mine
    And mine alone
    That believed in me

    But now
    It could end in a heartbeat
    It could break both or one
    Or silently break me
    But whatever it ends in
    I want you to know
    You are always special
    And I hope that I can be
    Your Everything.
  2. Sa Palomera

    Sa Palomera Well-Known Member

    I like it a lot BP. I think you should really show this to him. It might be an eye-opener for him :arms:
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  3. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    thanks hun i will do so...

    I appreciate everything...

    and you have been a great friend to me over this time we have been talking to each other...


    You are special!!!

    Love BP
  4. Sa Palomera

    Sa Palomera Well-Known Member

    aww thanks bp :hug: I'm not special, you are though :biggrin: :arms: :arms:
  5. Marshmallow

    Marshmallow Staff Alumni

    agrees with BP :biggrin:

    Eh nice BP, and yeah maybe you should send it to him :smile:
  6. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member


    you are a great person, and you helped with this poem, by just giving me some insight to what i should do to this situation i have gotten myself into...

    and thanks vikki...

    i am still thinking about giving it to him...

    you should read my poem despair, and let me know if i should give that one to him too..
  7. Shadowplay

    Shadowplay Staff Alumni

    Of everything I've read on here this is the first that made me want to cry, and actually did. I like the first 5 lines the best though.
  8. The_Discarded

    The_Discarded Staff Alumni

    Wow, this is really moving.

    I see a certain strength in its delivery; gives the piece an innate intensity about it, and evokes quite a bit of emotion.

    You have a great deal of talent!
  9. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    thanks guys...

    and fender... i can glad it moved you...

    keep your eye out on my poems... because there will be more when this one came from...

  10. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I like it very much and yes, I agree you should show it to the 'intended recipient'. thank you for sharing your inner soul with us. I feel privileged to be able to read your poetry!:smile:


  11. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    thanks hun...

    and because i dont want this thread to go on...

    just because of my emotions... i am having someone lock it... if they will

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